This is My colourful
Experience, happy reading!
This is the story about My Ex-girlfriend and me. In my life,
I have someone, someone who will never forget, someone who made my life so colourful.
Someone who made me felt strong and survived. But now, I hated her because that
was something happened, but I still love her.
When my birthday on December 27th 2010. I was her
friend. She invited me to go to a cinema to watch Gulliver Travel’s movie. It
was so surprise because it the twice I go to cinema. Just two of ours! I went
there with my motorcycle. I knew she loved me. She bought me a popcorn and soft
drink. In the middle of the film, I wanted to gents, I don’t know where it was,
so she told me to go to the toilet when the film was finished. Otherwise, it
would block other spectators. Oh my God, I could hold it any longer! When the
film was ended, I was relieved and I directly went to the toilet. On the way to
go home, I knew she will give me a chocolate that she made, but she was shy
because my friend say the chocolate was too many butter and salty.
In the night I got a text from her. She give a guessing
game, she asked me. Which ice cream do I like?
Cappuccino or caramel ? If you are wrong I would angry. Then do you know
I right or wrong? I gave wrong but she wasn’t angry with me. Then she asked me,
who is girl the closest to you? I didn’t answer it but I gave she a question.
What something that I like? She could not answer and got confused, then I
answer I like . . . (I mention her name). She was surprised, she directly said that
she love me and we are began our relationship. The next day we are went to MC
Donald to buy cappuccino ice cream. Our relationship during eight month is
unforgettable moment. We are not in relationship anymore. We are mind our business
and got a long distance relationship.
I'm sorry if i have a bad grammar, please leave a reply for correction :))
Well. I'm sorry to hear that, keep spirit!! Your writing is good enough, you will learn much from IELL 3 :D
ReplyDeleteBased on my experience, it's better to say "my girlfriend and I", instead of "my girl friend and me".
Never put "for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so" (fanboys) in the beginning of sentence, but use "funboys" after comma,
was has the same function with is, so was + v.ing, instead of was + v2
That's a bit that I know, don't mind to be corrected because we learn together.
I do apologize if I there's some mistakes, see ya!
thanks for correction ka achmad, you're the first visitors who leave comment ^_^
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